人教版读后续写之动作描写 学案答案（教师版）.docx

读后续写之动作描写
简单有效的六个微技能
基础技能：1. 运用具体动词替代笼统动词
2. 运用恰当短语替代普通动词
中阶技能：3. 增加修饰成分
4. 构造动作链
高阶技能：5. 多角度描述肢体动作
6. 构造动作面
如何使动作描写更饱满？
感知:结合语境,如何优化表达？
1. Because of his lies, she looked at him.
Because of his lies, she glared at him.
2 With only twenty seconds left, I ran to the line.
With only twenty seconds left, I rush/dashed to the line.
3. With only two minutes left, he ate his meal.
With only two minutes left. He swallowed up his meal.
4. She heard her mother say quietly as she walked down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up."
She heard her mother whispered as she tiptoed down the hall, "Don't wake your dad up. "
Skill 1：Choose Accurate Verbs用精准动词代替笼统动词
general words（笼统词） concrete words(具体词）
walk tiptoe(蹑手蹑脚地走)
run dash/rush (猛冲)
look glance (瞥见) glare (怒视) stare (凝视)
say/talk chat (闲聊) whisper (耳语)
cry weep/ sob （啜泣)