Every second brings a fresh beginning, every hour holds a new promise, every night dreams can bring hope, and every day is what we choose to make it. 应用文 Writing 2(慰问信) 应用文写作 WRITING 2 (2021·江苏省苏州一中高一下期中) 假定你是李华,你的美国朋友Tony因考试发挥失常,成绩不理想而情绪低落。请给他写封信表示安慰,要点如下: 1. 表示难过和理解; 2. 找出错误原因并及时改正; 3. 鼓励他重拾自信,实现梦想。 注意: 1. 词数80左右; 2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯; 3. 开头和结尾已为你写好,不计入总词数。 Dear Tony, ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Hua 审 题 分 析 思 路 点 拨 本篇书面表达的体裁属于应用文之慰问信。要求给考试失利的好友Tony写一封信表示安慰。这类信通常是向遭遇事故、自然灾害、人生挫折等的人表示安慰、同情和鼓励。在写这类信时,感情要真诚。本篇书面表达可以分三段来写:首段,表示对这件事的难过,理解对方的心情;中间段,给对方提供建议;尾段,给对方以鼓励:重拾自信,实现梦想。 Dear Tony, ①I’m sorry to hear that you didn’t do well in your exam and I know you must be depressed. ②There is no doubt that everyone fails at some point but as the saying goes, “Failure is the mother of success.” The sensible thing is to analyze the reasons for the failure. It’s important to find the mistakes you made, correct them and try to make up for your lack of knowledge. ③Only in this way can you make rapid progress in your study. Continue to go confidently in the direction of your dreams and live the life you have imagined. Yours, Li Hua (97 words) 标准范文及评析 ①使用“I’m sorry to hear that…”句型表示难过;用“I know…”表达作者理解对方的心情。 ②表示安慰:引用两个经典句,给文章增添文采;同时使用“There is no doubt that…”与“as the saying goes…”句型,显示出作者过硬的语言功底;连词“but”使用准确,表示转折。 ③使用部分倒装句,加强语气。强调找出错误并改正的重要性,并引出这样做能起到的效果——学****进步。 亮 点 词 句 1. I’m sorry to hear that you didn’t do well in your exam and I know you must be depressed.(两个宾语从句,第二个宾语从句省略了引导词) 听说你考试考得不好,我很难过,我知道你一定很沮丧。 2. There is no doubt that everyone fails at some point but as the saying goes, “Failure is the mother of success.”(that引导同位语从句) 毫无疑问,每个人都有失败的时候,但正如俗话所说:“失败是成功之母。”